I need to love!

[dogboy]

You are in love but nobody wants you. You are in high school and you like somebody but you are not sure if they like you. The new girl, Kat, is always being make fun of but i became hers and you now must find yours. To join:
Name-
age-
apperance-
race-
love-

Here's mine:

Name- Matt
age- 15
apperance- http://i113.photobucket.com/albums/n227/Anna_Jaganshi/Anime/WhiteDog.jpg
race- dog boy
love- Kat


Matt- dogboy
Kat- katgurldiva

[evanscense4]

((i'll join.who's playing kat?))

[katgurldiva]

Name- Kat
age- 15
apperance- http://i148.photobucket.com/albums/s16/koyuki-jinchurikki/1168711917_ecatperson.jpg
race- cat girl
love- Matt

[Elka_313]

((I want to join, but there is no setting...where is this all taking place...I need more plot))

[katgurldiva]

I can answer that for you. I know his password so i will fix it in a minute but you are high school students and you like someone but you don't know if they like you. I, kat, am the new girl so i am getting made fun of but Matt helps me and likes me.

[cripple_09]

((i wanna join too..!))

[katgurldiva]

join then i will fix the plot up quick.

[Chaos Angel]

((Hee hee... Newbies... So inexperinced~...))

[Kawaii Princess]

(newbies/ you guys r silly ^ ^))

[katgurldiva]

((shut up!!!))

[cripple_09]

((Okay we get it blah blah blah we post more than you blah blah blah...Whatever...))

[katgurldiva]

(hey he started today so yeah shut up)

[Elka_313]

((Hey be nice to the newbies the only way to get better is to practice all of the time, and be influenced by people whom are better than you....I'm not super special awesome at some things but i try!))

[cripple_09]

((Anyway, they're just posts it's not like "I have 12,000,000 posts I rule at life.."' It's just a post...so anyway, let's get our porfiles up..))

[katgurldiva]

((i am not talking to you. i am talking to the one who called you guys nubes. i help my boyfriend, dogboy, out with his RPs so when he is not on i run them))

[cripple_09]

((yeah I know you are and I think it's cool that you're helping your boyfriend...n.n))

[katgurldiva]

((i don't call people neebie cuz every body was one.))

[LillyPadDooDa]

((But....not every other newbie acted like you do. :o Sorry...but I didn't.))

[katgurldiva]

(how do i act? right now i am sticking up for them and this is my boyfriends RP and i am trying to get people to join he told me to)

[Elka_313]

((that Is Enough Ooc Talk!!!!!))

[LillyPadDooDa]

((Hey, chill out. I'm just saying my piece of the pie. You're not acting wrong or anything, I'm just saying, I just kind of enjoy newbies. They can be cute sometimes, getting adjusted to the new website...not using proper grammer. Hey, we all went through it. Long or Short.:) ))

[katgurldiva]

((okay now if you would like to speak to me PM me cuz i need some ppl to join.))

[Chaos Angel]

((Cripple, it has NOTHING to do with how many posts we have... It's just the grammer and the plots and cores of the whole roleplays that count... Half of the time newbies are incredibly adorable, but, some can be the most annoying people who can't even hold a candle to LITERATE. Nothing to do with how many posts I have.))

[katgurldiva]

((Cripple, it has NOTHING to do with how many posts we have... It's just the grammer and the plots and cores of the whole roleplays that count... Half of the time newbies are incredibly adorable, but, some can be the most annoying people who can't even hold a candle to LITERATE. Nothing to do with how many posts I have.))

Please get out of this RP if you have nothing nice to say or join if you want to speak.

[dogboy]

Matt walked into the school and saw Kat. "Hey Kat." said Matt as he kissed her.

[katgurldiva]

"Hey matt." said Kat.

[Chaos Angel]

Please get out of this RP if you have nothing nice to say or join if you want to speak.

((Hm... I wonder why your "boyfriend" is never on when you are... Hm... I need to call Conner-... Oops! Off subject there! XD
I didn't mean any offense, I really didn't... but... CAN I ADOPT YOU?! ><))

[katgurldiva]

((Who me? Names Kat.))

[dogboy]

(((Be nice to my girlfriend!!!!))

[Chaos Angel]

((Who me? Names Kat.))

((Yeah, I wanna adopt you as a newbie. But, I swear I'm a seriously nice person... I'm just really literate and hate to see people slaughter their sentences and screw their threads...))

[Chaos Angel]

(((Be nice to my girlfriend!!!!))

((Calm down, lover boy. I'm not being mean... or, atleast... I'm not trying to be))

[katgurldiva]

((Thanks dogboy.)) Kat walked to her locker and took out her stuff for her first class. "I hate school." Kat muttered as she walked into math. ((What do you mean adopt me?????))

[dogboy]

((seems like it)) Matt walked into class and sat down next to Kat.

[Chaos Angel]

((Thanks dogboy.)) Kat walked to her locker and took out her stuff for her first class. "I hate school." Kat muttered as she walked into math. ((What do you mean adopt me?????))

((I want to show you, and your boyfriend, how to get REALLY literate with sentences and like claim you as my little sister. Maybe I could help with arranging plots to threads and give alil' more detail to stuff. I swear I'm not making any fun of you, but it's something I'd like to do.))

[Chaos Angel]

((seems like it)) Matt walked into class and sat down next to Kat.

((Calm down, calm down. I'm sorry if ya'll took offense. I just tend to speak my mind just alil' too freely and people get offended. Can I adopt you too...?))

[katgurldiva]

((Yeah sure you can adopt me but dogboy will be mad if you try to adopt him.)) "Good morning students and how are you" said the teacher. Kat sat at her desk and started to draw. Thinks Class is so boring. I would rather be at my mom's wedding than here.

[dogboy]

((no you may not)) Looks at Kat and sees that she is not paying attention. Passes her a note saying ~whats wrong?~

[Chaos Angel]

((Yeah sure you can adopt me but dogboy will be mad if you try to adopt him.)) "Good morning students and how are you" said the teacher. Kat sat at her desk and started to draw. Thinks Class is so boring. I would rather be at my mom's wedding than here.

((Ha! I wouldn't be making ya'll brother and sister! It'd just be buddy-buddy. Oh well... He probably already thinks I'm a total b*tch anyways.))

[Chaos Angel]

((no you may not)) Looks at Kat and sees that she is not paying attention. Passes her a note saying ~whats wrong?~

((Pwwwease? It wouldn't make ya'll brother and sister! I swear~.))

[katgurldiva]

Kat reads the note and writes back ~Nothing i was just thinking of my dad and mom and how happy they were~ Kat passed the note back. ((oh come on now i have to act matt out. can my life get worse??))

Matt read the note and wrote ~Okay well the teacher is looking at you~ passes the note back

Kat reads the note and writes back ~He is~ Kat looks up and sees the teacher stareing at her. "Kat can you tell me what we are talking about?" asked the teacher. "No because i was not paying attention. I was thinking of my parents." said Kat, who looked like she was going to cry.

[Chaos Angel]

Kat reads the note and writes back ~Nothing i was just thinking of my dad and mom and how happy they were~ Kat passed the note back. ((oh come on now i have to act matt out. can my life get worse??))

Matt read the note and wrote ~Okay well the teacher is looking at you~ passes the note back

Kat reads the note and writes back ~He is~ Kat looks up and sees the teacher stareing at her. "Kat can you tell me what we are talking about?" asked the teacher. "No because i was not paying attention. I was thinking of my parents." said Kat, who looked like she was going to cry.

((... Now that is odd...))

((Mm-kay... You're roleplay is pleasent, much better than I thought it'd be... But, can I suggest something? I'm gonna re-write your post...))

Kat read the note with curious eyes then placed the tip of her penicl on the paper and wrote: "Nothing. I was just thinking of my dad and mom with how happy they were."

The young girl then folded the note in half and passed the note back to Matt with a quick smile so she wouldn't draw attention to her.

Matt opened the folded note to read what his girlfriend had wrote back. After his eyes scanned the paper he grabbed up his pen and wrote: "Okay, well, the teacher is looking at you". He then quickly passed it back to where the teacher wouldn't see then went back to acting casual.

Kat read the and looked up to see the teacher looking at her while she wrote "He is?" without looking at the paper from her eyes being glued on the teacher. The teacher let out an irritated sigh, shaking his head in disappointment at his student's lack of attention and sneeking of the notes. "Kat, can you tell me what we are talking about?"he questioned, arching his brow. "No, because I wasn't paying attention... I-I was thinking of my parents." answered Kat and looked like she was on the edge of bursting into tears while the rest of the class eyes her, snikering under their breath at times.

((Take a different approach to statements and details and add more to give readers a better picture in their minds of what you see the scene as. This is what's going through my head about what the scene would look like and may I suggest another thing...? When you write "Okay I'm going now" or something similiar be sure to write it like this "Okay, I'm going now." and the same thing goes with names. Example: "Kat you have to be careful". It should be written like this "Kat, you have to be careful." and also with answers. Example: "Yes, I'm leaving now." and "No, she can't come over right now."

Also, the "~"s I use for people who are speaking and having a slight song to their words or a purr. Example: "Oh, we're off to see the Wizard~." See what I mean? I would not use it for note writing. Instead use a more literate approach like what I did.

And just another suggestion. With your words like "she felt like she was going to cry", use a more creative approach like "she looked like she was on the edge of bursting into tears" and give details of their surroundings so it's not some subject that's flying wild and has a description.))

[katgurldiva]

((okay thanks for the advice)) Kat ran out of class crying.

Matt watched Kat run out of the classroom and into the hallway.

((is that good mother?? LOL!!))

[Chaos Angel]

((okay thanks for the advice)) Kat ran out of class crying.

Matt watched Kat run out of the classroom and into the hallway.

((is that good mother?? LOL!!))

((Mmm... Something like "Kat dashed out of the class room with hot tears running down her cheeks" would be more descriptive... And maybe if you used more than one sentence to give other roleplayers more of a mark if they wanted to help you or something... Guah! I talk too much... T_T))

((Lol! I'm your mother now? Whoa... That means Ryoken and I-... Ugh... 0_0))

((Maybe I should make a character...))

[katgurldiva]

((please do make a charrie then we can be friends in the RP))

[Chaos Angel]

((Hmm... I wonder why type of school girl I should make...? Should I go with the usual wing-it...? Or make her a challenge...? Hmm... Some many character types, so little time...))

[Chaos Angel]

Name- Cherry Vemon
Age- 17
Appearance-
http://i64.photobucket.com/albums/h178/Angel-Of-Rock/Anime%20School%20Girls/normal_etc65fl.jpg
Race- Human
Love- N/A

[katgurldiva]

Kat sat on the bench outside of the school with tears running down her cheeks.