Random story

[katgurldiva]

Here's a random stroy i made up. I will start it in a bit.

[katgurldiva]

Poison looked at her vampire boyfriend, Alexander, and smiled. She was so excited because tonight was the prom but they had to hunt down the Maxwell twins. Poison asked "Are you ready to hunt the Maxwells?" Alexander said "Oh course. Why wouldn't i be?" They walked outside and got into Alexander's mercedes and drove to Dullsville's cemetary and got out. They found the Maxwell's coffins and got ready to pull them out when the twins arrived.

Jagger and Luna Maxwell were dangerous vampires who hated Alexander because he never took Luna. Now Jagger was out to get him by using Poison. Luna on the other hand liked to hang out with Alexander and Poison. "Jagger what are they doing?" asked Luna. "Trying to get rid of us." said Jagger. He jumped at Alexander and Poison but they moved out of the way.

Alexander said "Jagger it is time for you to go home." Poison pulled out Garlic as Alexander gave himself a shot. Jagger and Luna started to cough and said "Get that crap away from us!" They backed away coughing like crazy.

{Somebody can help with the story if they want^^}

[katgurldiva]

Alexander looked at Poison and saw her smiling. She knew what vampires liked and disliked and would use it againest them. Alexander took her hand and together they went to a gravestone to finish the cememony so she would be his vampiress but then Jagger and Luna's younger brother Valentine appeared and saw his older siblings.


{I want somebody to help with the story plzz}

[katgurldiva]

{I give up with this one....not my most creative story!!}

[SiriuslyRemus]

If you still want help, I'd be happy to offer some tips, or edit a bit :)

[katgurldiva]

{I ran out of an idea but that would be nice^^}

[SiriuslyRemus]

Well, you said it was prom night, you could allways show them at the prom, and have some vampires show up to try to defeat them. I would reccomend going into more detail on some of the fighting, make it longer, and show people what's happening instead of telling them. Use all four sences, say what your charecter is smelling, what she's hearing, and fealing. And at the begining, you say Alexander is a vampire, maybe instead you should show it through the story, my describing his longer than usual teeth, or having him bite somone.

If that wasn't the kind of help you were looking for I'm sorry, but I hope it helps :)

[katgurldiva]

{That is helpful but to be honest I don't think I can get that creative}

[SiriuslyRemus]

It's fine if you're not inspired for this story, but in general just remember the thing about the four sences, it really helps to make your writing interesting, and it's what every creative writing teacher on the face of the planet will probably say. (At least all the ones I've had)

[katgurldiva]

Um...nah its just for some reason I can write on paper better than I can type not sure why.