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vampirenamedkat
08-29-2008, 05:45 AM
If anyone's read any of the Twilight series then you have a great taste in novels. After reading through the first book I had a dream and pulled me into a storie known as Elevator to Exile Island. I was going to have vampires in my story but switch to humans and extra stuff. I'll give a shortened preview and hopefully I will be able to publish the actual book. Hope you like it.

Kat woke with an intense pain on her spine, a nasty hangover and the feeling of cool grass below her. She sat werrily unknowing where she was. She felt her back and found an indent mark imprinted on her skin. On the ground was, of course, a small but farely good sized rock. She relized then that her coat was missing. I swear I was wearing it a second ago! Kat stood and found a slick object float in the breeze as it hung on a low branch. Kat snatched it knowing it was her coat. She wrapped it around her arms and like on cue a twig snapped behind her. Winding around she was met with a pair of bright yellow eyes. The creature slowely and silently made it's way out getting bigger and bigger while growling feirsly. It stood up on it's hinds legs. kat knew exactly what it was.
"It's a WEREWOLF!" She ran and the creature lunged along with her. Weaving through the trees she finally found a clearing that homed a street lamp. She jumped, landing after a summersalt. The wolf stood at the edge as if it were afraid to go any farther. She touched the pole, catching her breath and spieing a light coming from the abanded hotel. When she looked back towards where the werewolf was, it was gone. She wobbled her way to the hotel....

Sorry, don't think i want to give too much away, besides the chapters that I've already finished here on my home computer is really long. Want to here more?

vampirenamedkat
08-29-2008, 05:50 AM
Hey people. This stuff is never the best because were amateur's, or most. just read, it won't kill you.

TaeKwonDoGoth
08-30-2008, 01:06 AM
Pretty good, but you could use a little more detail, like describing what the werewolf was like before Kat stated it.

But other than that, great job!

♥[PROMISES][R][REAL]♥
08-30-2008, 03:13 AM
Agreed. But it's nice I like
it, you should continue.

vampirenamedkat
09-06-2008, 12:44 AM
Kat held his hand until he left. Once gone the emptiness grew greater in her heart. She wanted to cry but didn't. tears had already gone and left. She sat in the grassy meadow as her only love ran away for her own protection. The grass was so cold as she sat there with out him. She looked at her black skirt and played with it a bit. 5,4,3,2,1 She counted in her head. She stood and ran in the same direction as her love. She was supposed to stay in the meadow where she was safe but lonlyness drove her away from the safety and into the battle. Arrows wizzed past her head and thrown ax's hit trees instead of her head. She was stupid for putting herself in danger like this, but she couldn't help it. She made it to the shore where the war broke and the crisp sounds of the ocean on the rocks made her feel home, but she was still missing that piece that ran away. She ran close to the water and found an out stretch of rocks. she ran to the tip and sank on the wet rocks as spray covered her and made her shiver.

vampirenamedkat
09-06-2008, 05:26 PM
I know this doesn't make sense but I had a dream about it and wrote this thing in Drama as one of our assignments.

War the legs floating
property evil owners
plan bamboo world
reason love area
fence back curse thirsty
writing in red
no arms in middle
investigating rule house remember that part
found vampires of cut train picked up floating.

I know it's wierd but these are words and things that run through my mind.

SiriuslyRemus
09-06-2008, 08:02 PM
Are you looking for critique, or no? I like the little poem, it's nonsense verse, sounds a bit Lewis Carrol.

vampirenamedkat
09-07-2008, 05:21 AM
yeah, the poem was made of words in my head.

vampirenamedkat
09-12-2008, 12:59 AM
has any body noticed how lame it is around in this area?

Head sags, droops, rocks
falls off the building and to the ground
blood spilt, bones shattered as you you walk away.
"AHH" A cry of terror, sirens spiral
you fall down and DIE!

vampirenamedkat
09-21-2008, 09:42 PM
Hey guy's. i'm good at this stuff. give me some input or something. Please. *on knees and begging*