plaese say the truth

[little_white_fox]

okay, I need your guys help, to give me your opinin on my poems, I know they dont have rime or they are kinda weird but please give me your opinion

I want to love you
For who you are
I don’t care that you are a demon
I don’t care that you are a ghost
I only want to love you
For who you are
You are my love
Your sweet love
That I desire so much
Your kiss,
Your hug,
Your smile,
I will always remember
And I will always love.
You are my sun
You are my air that I breathe
You are always there for me
And that is why I love you

[little_white_fox]

My Life

One day an angel was born
That is what her father said
The next day the angel has grown
But she wasn`t happy
Because a war was in her house
Because the queen and king were fighting
The days have pasted like years
And now the angel has become a lonely angel
Because she was afraid of love
She wonders if there is happynes in the world
And she is afraid that she will be rejected
In the midle of he night she cries and cries
And wishes for a better life
She still remembers the war that was
Between her mother and her father
And now she praies every night
For the war to never take place
And in her prayes she sais
"Oh, i wish I could just die,"

[RoseHipZero]

i love it little^^

[little_white_fox]

i love it little^^

thanx, :D :o

[little_white_fox]

was sitting in my room
Crying out for help
Because a was has started in my life.
The time has past
And the night has came
An nobody answered my pray
I went to my bed
To go to sleep
But something stoped me
Something shiny
Something warm
And then I heared a voice
S very soft voice
That old me
"I am your angel
And here to help you,
I want to see you smilling
And happy all the time
I am your friend,
Forever with you."

[wiccagwen]

My Life

One day an angel was born
That is what her father said
The next day the angel has grown
But she wasn`t happy
Because a war was in her house
Because the queen and king were fighting
The days have pasted like years
And now the angel has become a lonely angel
Because she was afraid of love
She wonders if there is happynes in the world
And she is afraid that she will be rejected
In the midle of he night she cries and cries
And wishes for a better life
She still remembers the war that was
Between her mother and her father
And now she praies every night
For the war to never take place
And in her prayes she sais
"Oh, i wish I could just die,"
this is the best!!!!

[little_white_fox]

this is the best!!!!

well its about my life and thanx

[little_white_fox]

A friend is someone who you trust
A friend is someone near to you
He always helps you
He listens to you
He gives you his sholder
He give you his trust.......
When you get older
You don`t forgethim
Because he`s your friends
Forever.....

[little_white_fox]

Now I stay in my room
And I am all alone
I had a fight with my mother
That made me think
Who am I?
And what I`ll be?
I wonder if I`m someone special
Or someone normal
My life is a war
That I try to fight
I hate my life
I have no friends
I have no hope
For tomorrow
Oh, I just wish
That I was somebody als
And now I ask you my friend
Can you help me,
To discover why I live?
And why I was born?
Please help me

[kittan]

i adore it such rare emotion it it just *faints*

[little_white_fox]

i adore it such rare emotion it it just *faints*

(blush thanx)

[Charmless_Anachronism]

I liked them. Anyway, I'm going to try and give constructive criticism. Fix your spelling errors. It seems a lot more professional that way to me. It might just be me, but in some places it makes it a lot easier to understand if you fixed them.

And, I love that it doesn't rhyme. I prefer ones that don't rhyme, personally. I'm picky about poems. I liked the first two the best. Good poems.
.

[little_white_fox]

I liked them. Anyway, I'm going to try and give constructive criticism. Fix your spelling errors. It seems a lot more professional that way to me. It might just be me, but in some places it makes it a lot easier to understand if you fixed them.

And, I love that it doesn't rhyme. I prefer ones that don't rhyme, personally. I'm picky about poems. I liked the first two the best. Good poems.
.

thanx, and about the speling, well it id because I didn`t pay atention when I wrote them

[Jul4ik]

They're awesome!!!!!:D

[little_white_fox]

They're awesome!!!!!:D

*blush* hehe thanx

[DarkStorm]

Okay Little White. Sorry but they are terrible.
Please, offence is meant im sorry but you asked for my opinion.
Im payed to write poems so...
There you are.
It lacks any dramatic impact on the reader.

[little_white_fox]

Okay Little White. Sorry but they are terrible.
Please, offence is meant im sorry but you asked for my opinion.
Im payed to write poems so...
There you are.
It lacks any dramatic impact on the reader.

thanx for saying your opinion , hmmmmm I can face the truth , thanx

[DarkStorm]

Mine are normally Love, Darkness and Blood Letting.

[little_white_fox]

Mine are normally Love, Darkness and Blood Letting.

welll, I write poems to express my feeling and my toughts

[DarkStorm]

I do too.
Words of advice.
Don't let the darkness consume you, i did.
It tortures your mind.

[little_white_fox]

I do too.
Words of advice.
Don't let the darkness consume you, i did.
It tortures your mind.

to late darstorm, to late like i said before i am a suicidel so without poems or storys my mind is in darkness again

[DarkStorm]

We are the same you and I.
Our hearts ripped in twine,
Once more,
Just once,
Love or bleed,
In eternal Darkness.
Hand in hand.

[little_white_fox]

We are the same you and I.
Our hearts ripped in twine,
Once more,
Just once,
Love or bleed,
In eternal Darkness.
Hand in hand.

hmmmmm, you think? hmmmm yeah I think you are right .....

[little_white_fox]

What is love?
Is it a dream
That I wish, that it will never end?
Is it a thing that people desire, the most?
What is love?
That is my question
I don’t know the answer
And I want to know
But where can I find my answer?
And when?
Where?
Where?
I will wait for love all my life
And I will find it
Some day……

[DarkStorm]

Sooner than you think, beleive me.
Love is nothing and nothing is everything, for that same reason everything in itself is love.
It is just probability, and an infinite loop in the eternal nothingness that is the so called perceptive existence.

[little_white_fox]

Sooner than you think, beleive me.
Love is nothing and nothing is everything, for that same reason everything in itself is love.
It is just probability, and an infinite loop in the eternal nothingness that is the so called perceptive existence.

okay, whatever you call it , but I hate love, I will never belive in it because my life was distroied because of love and I hate it, I hate it because It can desipear and apear whenever she wants to

[DarkStorm]

I could stop that instantly but.. would you want me to?

[DarkStorm]

And, when the time comes, will i be ready to do what i have to?
Or will we be cast once more into the hollow pitch?

[little_white_fox]

I could stop that instantly but.. would you want me to?

I am afraid to love, that is the truth, because after love a war starts between those two people.............................. but still yeah I want someone to help me, .......................................

[DarkStorm]

I..... stay with us for now, meet with me after the parting of ways.
Then let us be consumed in darkness together.
Let it ensnare and destroy our souls, but not when you are alone.
With me. Together we can tame the darkness within.

[little_white_fox]

I..... stay with us for now, meet with me after the parting of ways.
Then let us be consumed in darkness together.
Let it ensnare and destroy our souls, but not when you are alone.
With me. Together we can tame the darkness within.

...... what can I say is a nice invitacion........... I think I will accept it

[DarkStorm]

You have no idea still, so weak, frail and beautifully immature.
You have much to learn my dear.

[little_white_fox]

You have no idea still, so weak, frail and beautifully immature.
You have much to learn my dear.

I know, I know, I am still a learner but one question if you shall let me can you give me something so you can show me that I can trust you? because my eyes are blinded and i can`t se the trust

[DarkStorm]

I am afraid not. There is no "Trust" as you say, i have no photos or facilities to create them, i have no camera of any sort.
All i can say is. Irom Otnemem Retson Retap.

[little_white_fox]

I am afraid not. There is no "Trust" as you say, i have no photos or facilities to create them, i have no camera of any sort.
All i can say is. Irom Otnemem Retson Retap.

Irom Otnemem Retson Retap? ...................................

[DarkStorm]

In my arms live eternally.
In the arms of God suffer in pain.

[little_white_fox]

In my arms live eternally.
In the arms of God suffer in pain.

if I trust you and you will hurt me then for me that is the final step, i trusted to meny people and they hurted me I am afraid to trust, I am afraid to love other words I am afraid to live

[DarkStorm]

Ohh, my dear, never fear to live. In my temple there is no life, only lusting and hungering souls.
Feel me rushing through your veins, do you feel the precious pain?
End, beginning.
I am one and the same.
We are eternal and always have been.
Hark all ye cerubim, fall and burn in my temples flames.

[little_white_fox]

Ohh, my dear, never fear to live. In my temple there is no life, only lusting and hungering souls.
Feel me rushing through your veins, do you feel the precious pain?
End, beginning.
I am one and the same.
We are eternal and always have been.
Hark all ye cerubim, fall and burn in my temples flames.

I see that, hmmm thanx, ..................

[DarkStorm]

Hahaha, du hast mit.
Mit hast du.
Empty nothingness.

[little_white_fox]

Hahaha, du hast mit.
Mit hast du.
Empty nothingness.

hmmmm yap, I must live you right now, my brother is trying to kill himself again, la revedere

[DarkStorm]

Crucify him on an inverted cross and paint it with the blood of a pig.
No, don't really, im not a satanist.

[protector13]

Crucify him on an inverted cross and paint it with the blood of a pig.
No, don't really, im not a satanist.
DUDE XD UNUFF WITH THE POTRY THINGI!

[DarkStorm]

Not really. Not just yet.... i mean, i get paid to do this normally.

[protector13]

Not really. Not just yet.... i mean, i get paid to do this normally.
o ok more to ya then XD

[DarkStorm]

Too blooming right, all these poems i don't know what to do with my money.

[little_white_fox]

Too blooming right, all these poems i don't know what to do with my money.

oooooooooooooo por you

[DarkStorm]

I know, I burn it most of the time.

[little_white_fox]

I know, I burn it most of the time.

my opinion is to cheap it and save it for hard times

[little_white_fox]

why?.
why can`t I do this
why can`t I make friends
why can`t I trust you
why can`t I live safe
I really need someone
Close to help
because I`m alone
and try to kill myself

[DarkStorm]

Then stay here with me in the darkness.

[little_white_fox]

Then stay here with me in the darkness.

don`t worry I can`t liave the darknees and if i try the darkness wont leave me, but will you leave me?

[DarkStorm]

No, i won't. I'll look after you and i'll see if Jess will help too.

[protector13]

ill help.......

[little_white_fox]

okay okay .............

[little_white_fox]

No, i won't. I'll look after you and i'll see if Jess will help too.

thanx alot, I need someone really close to me so he or she could help me