who wants to read a crappy poem

[living_in_twilight]

The Facade

I can see through your facade
Behind the mask you pramanade
they think they know and never ask
but they don't know you just your mask
somehow they don't recognize
that longing look in your eyes
I see you lie for all the wrong reasons
and telling the truh just for treason
around your eyes the sin shows through
all the things you really do
the sin of knowlage
the sin of lust
the sin of truth
the sin of trust
all show through from behind
are all the ones around you blind
to the viper you are
to the lying wretch
ready in wait
calm, sly, and cool
for the next blind fool

((yes I KNOW it stops rhyming at the end...nurf. >>))

[the_lost_little_girl]

The Facade

I can see through your facade
Behind the mask you pramanade
they think they know and never ask
but they don't know you just your mask
somehow they don't recognize
that longing look in your eyes
I see you lie for all the wrong reasons
and telling the truh just for treason
around your eyes the sin shows through
all the things you really do
the sin of knowlage
the sin of lust
the sin of truth
the sin of trust
all show through from behind
are all the ones around you blind
to the viper you are
to the lying wretch
ready in wait
calm, sly, and cool
for the next blind fool

((yes I KNOW it stops rhyming at the end...nurf. >>))

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!

i love it!
it sounds like one of my friend she acts all happy and no one sees the pain she's really going throught but when i look into her eyes its painfuly true to me all the pain she's in.
:D i give you a 10/10

[living_in_twilight]

I'm sorry about your friend, I have a friend kinda like that...

and my poem's not that good, trust me...

[okami-san]

IT.. reminds me of myself..... Hehe... ^^... Everyone thinks im a happy-happy person but underneath it all... Well lets just say if you read MY poems you'll see how dak and depressed a person I am.. But that is one beautiful poem... *Claps* I give it 1000 out of ten.

[little_white_fox]

The Facade

I can see through your facade
Behind the mask you pramanade
they think they know and never ask
but they don't know you just your mask
somehow they don't recognize
that longing look in your eyes
I see you lie for all the wrong reasons
and telling the truh just for treason
around your eyes the sin shows through
all the things you really do
the sin of knowlage
the sin of lust
the sin of truth
the sin of trust
all show through from behind
are all the ones around you blind
to the viper you are
to the lying wretch
ready in wait
calm, sly, and cool
for the next blind fool

((yes I KNOW it stops rhyming at the end...nurf. >>))

well its very beautifull, hmmm about the rhyme well it doesn`t actualy mather is it rymes or not it mayers what you write about and how much of you hart and feelings you put in it

[living_in_twilight]

Thank's guys ^^'


*wonders why people like it*

[little_white_fox]

Thank's guys ^^'


*wonders why people like it*

we like it because is really good, and because it tels the truth, oh well I like it because its my kind of poem